UnNews talk:Something Wicked This Way Comes
|Final Score:||36.9||A very good concept. Not VFH yet. While the concept is well-reinforced and well-sustained throughout the article, there are particularly extended patches of recognition grass and smirk dirt in-between LOL conifers. Just a bit more time and imagination and surely something good will this way come.|
|Reviewer:||Mightydandylion (talk) Fk 05:47, 19 April 2008 (UTC)|
Pee Review Round Deux
Note 1. "The wicked thing? Oh yeah, I saw it," said Georgina Tizzlesworth, a local pig farmer. "It was an army of orcs or giants. It was definitely either giants or orcs. They were big like giants, but with the determination of orcs." Mrs. Tizzlesworth looked nervously from side to side and rushed quickly into her ramshackle house before we could ask any more questions but added, "You folks need any mud?" Good. I don’t know why, but this made me laugh.
Note 2. "There is a strict procedure for this sort of thing," Lord Buggleton said. "When with every breath the air grows stale and deathly cold winds howl and wail, every citizen, as calmly and safely as possible, is to join the nearest angry mob and pick up the pointiest pitchforks and warmest burning torches they can find. It won't help any, but it sure does make them feel better. ...this is off the record, right?" Very good. A slight change and yet it now elicited a laugh.
Note 3. "When Olroth, Undead Lord of Screams, breezed through Unprotectedville in 1103, did Buggleton flinch? No way. Our angry mob lasted a full eight seconds before every single peasant died. ...you guys need any filth?" I like the filth peddling, haha. However, is there a way to make the “Our angry mob lasted a full eight seconds before every single peasant died.” more direct, pointed, matter-o-factly? Because the ellipses kind of diffuse the delivery of the previous line.
Note 4. "Last year, it was a balrog from the mines of Cydon, and before that it was a balrog from the mines of Nygar!" No! Please don’t take off this line, lol. My apologies for any misunderstanding.
Note 5. "Whether it be giants, orcs, wizards, or a giant orc wizard, the town has been utterly screwed every single time." Mr. Ulston has suggested that the wicked thing this way coming is wasting it's time. "Unless they need a really skilled scholar, they shouldn't even come this way. ...you guys need any scholaring?" Ah, good. Hahaha
Note 6. "Yeah, I've seen it too many times. Some wicked person or group or gelatanous blob wants to invade a tiny little village of insignificant morons, and people get hurt." Fine.
Note 7. "I mean, if you won't capture me then at least kill me so I won't have to deal with this mind-numbing place anymore! ...you guys need a mayor?" Hahaha, very good.
Note 8. "Six peasant photographers were lost getting this beautiful shot." Aha! Excellent.
Ah, Cajek. You've done it again, answering the questions I've always wanted to ask about expendable peasants but never had the courage. A brilliant job... Any of you folks need some praise? Muzak 18:59, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
- Ha, awesome! Thank you Muzak! Got any suggestions? • <Apr 19, 2008 [19:14]>
My favourite book!
I love SWTWC. Thanks for the article! The land of make-believe doesn't believe in me:( 13:09, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
Ah, books. How about this one: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Something_Wicked_This_Way_Comes_(novel) Ray is teh man! -- di Mario 18:09, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
Now that I finished the bloody audio
I have to say two things: terribly sorry about the quality. I have some issues with the computer, hopefully it will get better. Second, this is bloody briliant! I actually had to rerecord some parts when I started laughing.14:19, 2 May 2008 (UTC)