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Fixed version of this, please give me any critiques, suggestions, cake, etc. User:Oliphaunte/sig 19:22, January 12, 2011 (UTC)

That page is AMAZING! I laughed! And I haven't laughed since... this afternoon. Anyway, good job! —Preceding signed comment added by Airhogs777 (talkcontribsWP) 05:01, January 20, 2011 (UTC)
I'm on it. --Black Flamingo 16:32, January 29, 2011 (UTC)
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Final Score: 30 So overall, nice work, especially for one of your firsts. Seriously, I know I've been critical but noob articles are rarely this good. The key things to work on are the characterisation of the father, who as I've said gets clichéd at times, and the general flow of the piece, which is occasionally awkward. Sort some of these issues out and the article will immediately be in much better shape. If there's anything I've said here that you want me to explain better, or if you want my opinion on anything I might have missed, please let me know and I'll try to help. I hope the review is ok.
Reviewer: --Black Flamingo 12:36, January 30, 2011 (UTC)