Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/No I Didn't

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No I Didn't[edit]

I rewrote this article from the incredibly tiny stub that it was (check the history) and tried to make it into a more expansive monologue. I'd appreciate some advice on possible improvements. Thanks in advance, mrmonkey72 01:02, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

Sorry to say this, kid, but this kind of thing has been done so many times. Look at your UnNewses, they are simply awesome, like professional quality. If you can write like that (that well, whatever...) in an article you will have a feature in a click. --Sir DJ ~ Irreverent OZ! Noobaward.jpg Wotm.jpg Unbooks mousepad.PNG GUN.png 13:44, 30 July 2008 (UTC)
Yeah, I decided that I'm not really this fond of it, I mostly just did it as practice. YesTimeToEdit, you can still review this if you want, but don't worry about it if you've got other stuff to do. --mrmonkey72 14:32, 30 July 2008 (UTC)
YesTimeToPee!

Hi Mrmonkey! The brilliant and impeccable Steel Kidney, Yettie, is going to grace your article with a bit of his pee. Probably quite a lot of his pee. Hopefully it won't be too drenched.

Yettie hopes to complete the review today. If for some reason he's taking longer, please feel free to give him a gentle reminder on his talkpage.
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Final Score: 29.56 So I've given you a load of suggestions there on how to improve this. However, I'm sorry to say that I wouldn't really waste lots of time and effort improving this article only to have a funny finished project that will annoy quite a few people and provoke the "This isn't new" reaction (as DJ, there, demonstrated). I would reiterate what he said...you can write some brilliant stuff, but this article isn't really among your best and probably never could be. Why not try writing an alternative namespace article (UnBooks, HowTo, Why?, UnTunes etc.) for a bit of alternative fun. I see you've already written one or two (and by the way, these days I don't really consider UnNews an alternative namespace). Good luck, whatever you decide to do.

By the way I read your comment halfway through and decided to finish the article so as to rack up one more "in-depth" article in my race to overtake MDL in number of reviews. I guess you've already realised a lot of what I said, just pretend you haven't, okay? Pretend the stuff I'm saying is entirely fresh... :-)

And one final note: sorry for letting this review get out of hand with all the odd side notes intend to humour your monkey-personage. :-)

Reviewer: - [19:31 30 July] Sir FSt Don http://images.wikia.com/uncyclopedia/images/a/a3/MafiaHatBlack.gif Yettie