Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Stan (country)

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Stan (country)[edit]

I wrote this one a while ago, but it hasn't really changed much. Just looking for some input. Obviously, I guess...

Smallbeer.pngSpillin DylanSmallbeer.pngTALKSmallbeer.pngEDITSSmallbeer2.png00:02, April 28 2008

Sorry you may have to bear with me, cause it's possible I won't finish this today. Sorry, 'bout that! - 12:54 3 May Sir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTETalk!Read!Sign!Whore!CMC!Pee!
Woah, back off there, 'cause it's YesTimeToPee...for YTTE, not you. Sorry, you'll just have to go find somewhere else to empty your bladder, or you can choose to wet yourself. I got this spot, biatch.
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Final Score: 24.4 To be honest: This needs a lot of work to make it good. You need to read UN:HTBFANJS and work out how you're going to add more humour to this and steer it away from the simple "narrative" style you have at the moment. On the image front: you need 2 or 3 more and they need to be very good pictures. As I've said, what about maps, pictures of the capital, pictures of the various factions from the war? The formatting is pretty standard, if a little boring. You could jazz this up a little bit by adding the country information bar down the right hand side and adding those pictures. A bit of varied formatting is also required to make this easier on the eye. As it is you've managed to steer away from blocks of text, so the reader doesn't immediately look at it and go "I don't have time to read this!" - which is very good. You've now got a choice to salvage this and make it a good article, or put your effort into other articles. If you do chose to continue with this article I wish you the very best of luck, if you don't I hope you do well with your other articles!
Reviewer: - 12:29 4 May Sir FSt. (QotF BFF NotM) YTTETalk!Read!Sign!Whore!CMC!Pee!