Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Things to call a Jew
Before i take off consturction I want to add some new names, also if it is heading towards being huffed can soemone suggest how to fix it (it's my first article)- Thank you- Wolffencer 18:28, 14 May 2007 (UTC)
|Reviewer:||----OEJ 14:51, 15 May 2007 (UTC)|
The sentence "He went from providence to providence of Rennisccance France looking for the perfect name until he was assasinated for "uprooting" the Jewish religion (and because he was incredibly flaming)" has serious flaws. I suggest you work on the spelling of province, Renaissance, and assassinated, and also on the grammatical implications of being incredibly flaming. There are similar prose problems elsewhere in the article.
As far as concept goes, calling Jews names because their religion is "hilarious" is not very witty on the face of it. A more satirical approach might be better.
- Jews responded to Catholic taunts by calling their taunters "cat-lickers" and "Shitty Shatty Catlicks". Protestants joined in, calling the Catholics "mackerel-snappers" and "Pope-boys". Catholics responded by calling the Protestants "Grotty Protties" and "Satan's suckups". Shortly thereafter Zoroastrians chimed in, labeling Jews "matzo ballers" and Lutherans "people of the 95 feces". The Pope loved the "95 feces" slur, but added that Baptists should be called "Fwaptists" and Hindus called "sin-do's". Hindu fundamentalists immediately joined the fray, calling Zoroastrians "Zorro-assholians" and -- becoming a bit confused -- called Japanese Shintos "Squintos". When reminded about the Pope they added that Catholics could be called "hamster pickles", which made no sense. Meanwhile the German Lutheran Council declared that henceforth Anglicans would be called "angle-worms", Pentacostals would be "hymies", and Buddhists would be called "niggers". Buddhists immediately objected, claiming that "niggers" was already taken by another ethnic group, and that the Lutheran Council was "a bunch of ignorant idiots". The Buddhists proposed that Lutherans be called "sour krauts", "gooferans", and "a bunch of ignorant idiots". The Lutheran Council then formulated a "final solution to the Buddhist problem", which apparently involved incense chambers and forced-meditation camps. A famous English atheist spoke up, calling Christians "lost-in-the-mistians" and "Bible-bonkers"; Hindus "hindoodoos"; and Confucians "confusedians". Infuriated religious leaders retaliated, saying that atheists should be called "asseists" and "Godless motherfuckers" and "athy-athy-go-take-a-bathy". At last an ancient, wizened Namibian shaman stood up and said, "Why doesn't everybody agree to just call everybody else assholes?" The Russian Orthodox Church quickly used a surplus USSR missile to nuke the shaman for being a wiseguy, and then everybody got back to the serious business of insulting everybody else.
Or whatever. Take the idea of religious slurs and develop it a bit. If you just substitute the syllable "jew" into a few words, you have a very limited, very shallow piece. You can go a lot further. Of course, if the article is just jew-baiting then it's not satire, it's not parody, and it's not humor. ----OEJ 14:42, 15 May 2007 (UTC)
|Final Score:||35||I think it's a solid place to start, but has a ways to go before it feels "Complete".|
|Reviewer:||--User:ToobiePhisted 16:59, 15 May 2007 (UTC)|
Don't be too discouraged by harsh reviews, some people just can't stand a little political incorrectness thrown around. Expand the sections you have before adding more. Either take out the small sections like "Things to call a Jew that likes sports" or add to them, but ensure the content is quality. Many small sections would not be nearly as good as afewer, larger sections.
--User:ToobiePhisted 16:59, 15 May 2007 (UTC)