Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/ HowTo: Get Around In A Fighting Tournament
Okay, this is my second time putting this article through Pee Review. I've improved on it some (and a couple people added their ideas too), but I feel my weakest is in the Character Types section, which I feel is essential to the article's humor. There's a way to poke fun at them that I need to tap into, but I'm not sure how to go about it. Possibly a few other areas that I have wary feelings on too, but not sure on them either. So any advice or ideas would be nice. Again, don't be too harsh on me.
I hope I can improve upon this some more so that it's just right. Thanks for any help, it's appreciated. --Hanyouman 00:01, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
|Final Score:||47||A great article overall. Could use more sarcasm and jabs at the skankity portrayal of women. Also, the "characters" section needs to decide what it's teaching you to do: befriend the competition, or kill them.|
|Reviewer:||--Medvedev (scream) 06:49, 1 March 2007 (UTC)|
Hey this has definitely improved tons since I reviewed it the first time. I maybe wouldn't score it quite so highly but I have a natural aversion to being overly positive - it's really good. I'm guessing from the amount of work you've put into it you'll be looking at VFH pretty soon. The most important thing to work on now is the introduction. Get your readers to laugh out loud in the first few lines and they'll be on your side right the way through. At the moment I would be reluctant to vote for it since most of our ADHD afflicted viewers would simply give up before they got to the meat of it. --Kelpan 23:43, 3 March 2007 (UTC)