User:Tagstit/Math

Intro: 3

Reading it through, there is really nothing funny here. I know this may be a section to set up your article and give it platform, but you need to make it more than that! You need to make it so that the reader wants to read on! Give it more personality and tone. Make the reader laugh at the beginning. Doing that will make the rest of your article easier to read. As you have it now, I think we can both agree it is dull. Read concept to get an idea of how I think you can improve the character's whole personality, and try to use it in here.

Addition and Subtraction: 4

Better, taking in the fact attempts at humor were sought after. Lots of them were misses though. The best part was the fact that everyone can relate to a tutor going back into days of Kindergarten to review things. But still, a lack of personality in the tutor takes away from this. All of the answers being 42 isn't particularly funny either. Now, if you were to follow my ideas on concept, and have the tutor really gay and corny, you could have him say every answer is 69. "Ya I know every answer is 69 isn't that hilarious, you can relate to the humor in that right?"

Multiplication and Division: 5

The high point in your article. Only because aggression is arising and the tutor starts to look pathetic. You still need to add more though. You reuse the "I already learned this joke" and by this point it is starting to become old. Again though, the character of the tutor needs to be built up more so this rage can become more humorous.

Algebra: 4

Algebra, first of all is spelled wrong. Again, this is all basic silly math humor. And it really does nothing more than crack a small smile.