From Pee Review
So I wrote this and it's probly really bad, Some help would be great.--Absurdism 01:44, 6 October 2006 (UTC)
- As with Simone de Beauvoir, it just needs less complete random. Apparent random that's actually got a point is another matter, of course - so pick your random to mean something.
- Let me guess, you write by churning out a whole lotta crap on a subject then cutting back? Then you need to make that editing phase really count - David Gerard 10:50, 6 October 2006 (UTC)
- Fixed spelling and some flow problems. Revising and rewriting is good. As Monsieur Gerard writes, make editing count. ----OEJ 16:36, 8 October 2006 (UTC)
- Okay so I updated it. I tyred to make it sound drier and smarter, and less understanble. kind of like Hegel.--Absurdism 18:24, 17 October 2006 (PDT)
How about this:
Hegel is known to have invented the Here and Now, he is the father of instantaneous cognition. Here is the Here only when it is the Now, however, the Notion of the Here is called the This which is a different This than that of the Now, the Now is not the essential this but rather the extrinsic Notion of the Here. After the cognition of the Notion-Essence-Here-Now-This, consciousness fold back on itself and reflect on a There which is not the same There as the Here but rather a dynamic Here which is a manifestation of the Now