hey, I know this article is barely done, but please keep it in the ICU or whatever until i have more time to complete it.Nezlr 20:14, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
- If you want to work for as long as you want, without fear of deletion, why not just put the page in userspace(ie User:Nezlr/Iceburg)? That way, you can work without fear of deletion, and you can just move it back out into mainspace when you're done. - 20:19, Apr 23
problem is, this is only my 3rd article, and the other articles i've written sucked. If i make a full fledged article, and it sucks, thats alot more wasted time.Nezlr 00:11, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
- Well, have a look at HTBFANJS, read some of the site's better pages, and try to pick up on the things that made those articles good, and apply them to yours. Writing humor's kind of a trial-and-error thing, and it takes people a while to get the hang of it. - 21:55, Apr 26
I know, i know. I read the thing, and made many changes to apply the concepts of "how to be funny and not just stupid"
remember, this is my first article i actually put a little effort into keeping.
also, i know it probably sucks, so be honest: out of 1-10, how much do you like it?( what is currently there), and what can i do to fix that?
Nezlr 21:42, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
- Hmm... out of 10? Probably at 6ish, humorwise, going by the reviewing scale. To make it better, you could try to make those bulleted sections into not-bulleted sections. Lists are kinda boring--I'd much rather read a paragraph about something than a list of somethings. I'd also recommend ditching the Chuck Norris reference. There are about a million of them filling up the database, they all amount to him being really really strong, and almost none of them manage to make me laugh. Of course, there are opinions other than mine, out there, so you could certainly hand this over to the folks at Pee Review, and see what they think. - 22:58, Apr 26
alright. i know the chuck norris reference and list werent needed, i just wasnt sure wahat to do with them. I am keeping the russian reversal joke because it expresses how redundant and stupid they are.
okay, i removed the ICU tag. I know its not COMPLETELY completed, but its long enough and has enough material that i think it can be a full article. besides, if its bad, there are articles that are worse. I rarely laugh at my own material, and i still think its funnier than some out there. for the one who put the ICU tag on the article, i added as much as a could. if it still is in the NRV, ill do what i can, or if it fails miserably, it can be deleted.