From Pee Review
I recently wrote an article about Jet Packs. It's my second full article, and I was wondering if someone wanted to review it?
|Final Score:||28.914236||This has a long way to go but it could be very good. I'd make a lot more of the potential for explosions and violent death of the user. Maybe put in a picture of an explosion with a caption like: "Our late construction engineer conducting a test flight." You could maybe think of writing the article as if you're trying to sell jet packs, while trying to ineffectively brush over all the dangers involved. You could probably lose the Michael Jackson/Kiddie fiddling references, they're not really relevant.|
|Reviewer:||--Kelpan 16:37, 5 April 2007 (UTC)|